The Writing Series: NSFW

Ok, now, let’s get down to the nitty gritty. Sex. Rather, sex scenes. You’re warned if you’re feint of heart. Stop now. Click out.

Hmm, let me start by saying most of mine hover in the PG-13 area. I have a few R/NC-17. I don’t think I have any X rated ones. Truth is once you get to X rated, or what I feel is X-rated, you’re at such a granular level of description it’s bordering on a gyno exam. And let’s face it, there’s nothing sexy about that.

So I prefer the sweeping descriptions that insinuate the feeling, usually in a decently long build up.

Instead of X-rated:

His fingers bit into the ample flesh of her butt as he pushed her into the hard wall, lifting her up to him. She cried out the pleasure pain of his #@&# ripping into the soaked folds of her #$*% as he yanked her long dark hair in unforgiving pulls arching her back as he hammered into her over and over again. Her short limbs locked her small body around him trying to ease the punishment of the thick %$@! that slammed her throbbing @#$% causing her big tits to bounce a jagged confused rhythm, a relentless f*cking, animal instinct ruling.

I say:

His hands clasped her ample bottom lifting her to him as her sinewy limbs locked her small body around him sealing their pleasure. She sighed feeling the cold tiles cling to the warm flesh of her back as she sunk onto his heavy manhood. Her porcelain arms clasped his head their eyes locking. His soulful blue eyes fell into the erotic promises the liquid pools of her dark eyes offered. His fingers weaved into the long chocolate hair cascading around them, arching her back, opening the column of her neck for his lips to explore. His other hand overflowed with the ample offering of her breasts as he pushed deep filling the aching space inside of her, bottoming again and again, like an anchor tying her to him, possibly forever.

If you ask me, the first description doesn’t just read painful it sounds like it feels painful. I was squirming just writing that. Not my style. Plus you add words like vaginal folds and I’m suddenly in a doctor office with bright white lights, feet strapped to stirrups and a cold metal clamp about to happen. It’s no bueno. I don’t need a clinical description of the parts. I have them. We’re good there.

Also I don’t like the graphic in anything, sex or gore. You see I censored out some of the terms that make this semi-good Catholic girl blush. I’m pro sex but I feel like describing it at that level takes away the beauty of the act and the bodies performing the act. Especially the female form which is always a lush beautiful landscape regardless of size or shape. When you start using crude words to describe us it steals the power of our Aphrodite.

***Sidenote: I HATE the word tits. It was hard for me to write that***

I have read some straight erotica that probably is better called porn. Scene #1 is what you get (even more graphic and less nuanced) when you’re reading that kind of erotica. And truthfully, it’s probably what the reader wanted so if the writer doesn’t give it to them then it’s a tease and you’ve lost a reader.

Also the position you chose can influence to how much description you need. Against a wall is a layup in romancelandia, every girl’s fantasy. You can’t go wrong. I… You know what? I have some thoughts on positions and I think enough to warrant another post. So look for a Kama Sutra post down the road…

One of my favorite sex scenes is from The Witching Hour by Ann Rice. It’s a little rapey and we’ll also get into that another post. But, in the meantime, the spirit that is haunting the house takes the heroine in one hot, make me bite my lip, possibly grab a mechanical instrument and get some relief, kinda way. I don’t know how she pulls this scene off but all those years of writing erotica paid off when she made the switch to the supernatural.

And that scene doesn’t do justice to what she had LeStat doing in those books.

Published by miasotowrites

Wannabe Writer Tired Mother Aspiring Slacker

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